How to Write a LinkedIn About Section That Sells
Open most LinkedIn profiles and the About section is either empty or written like a press release. "Jane is a results-driven professional with a passion for..." Nobody talks like that. And nobody reads past the first line of it.
That's the real problem. The About section is the one place on your profile where you get to speak in your own voice, at length, in full sentences. A blank box says you didn't bother. A third-person bio says you outsourced it. Both waste the prime real estate recruiters actually read after your headline.
Key Takeaways
- The About section is your first-person pitch, not a third-person bio.
- The first line truncates at roughly 220 characters, so front-load your hook.
- Recruiters search LinkedIn by keyword, so name your role, skills, and tools in plain words.
- Use short paragraphs and white space, not one dense block.
- End with a clear line about what you want and how to reach you.
Why a blank or third-person About wastes prime real estate
Recruiters use LinkedIn as a search engine. They type a job title, a skill, a tool, and the platform returns people whose profiles contain those words. LinkedIn's own talent solutions are built around exactly this kind of keyword matching. If your About section is empty, you hand back a chunk of searchable text for free.
A third-person bio fails differently. It reads as distant and ghost-written, even when you wrote it yourself. Harvard Business Review has covered how authentic, specific self-presentation outperforms polished corporate filler when people decide whether to trust you. On a profile, trust is the whole game. Write like a person and you sound like someone a hiring manager wants to talk to.
The structure that works
A strong About section has four moves. Keep them in this order.
A hook in the first line. LinkedIn truncates the About preview after roughly two short lines, then hides the rest behind "see more." Most readers never click. So your opening line has to land on its own. Lead with what you do and who you do it for, not with "I am."
What you do, plus proof. After the hook, expand. Name your work in plain terms, then back it with a result or two. Numbers help. "Cut onboarding time from three weeks to four days" beats "passionate about process improvement."
The keywords recruiters search. Work in the role titles, skills, and tools someone would actually type to find you. Not a stuffed list, just the real words for your real work. This is the same instinct behind a sharp resume opener, which is why it's worth understanding the difference between a resume summary vs objective before you draft this section.
A short close and CTA. Tell the reader what you're open to and how to reach you. One line. "Open to senior data roles in fintech. Reach me at jane@email.com."
First person, plain voice, white space
Write in first person. Say "I" and "my." It's your profile, not a museum placard.
Keep the voice plain. Read each sentence out loud. If you'd never say it in a coffee chat, cut it. Buzzwords like "synergy" and "thought leader" make the eyes slide off the page.
Then break it up. A wall of text loses people on a phone screen, where most profiles get read. Use short paragraphs, two or three sentences each, with white space between them. The About section is part of a larger picture, so it should fit the rest of your profile. If you haven't done that groundwork yet, start with LinkedIn profile optimization and come back to this.
A short fill-in skeleton
Copy this, swap the brackets for your real details, and cut anything that feels forced.
[One punchy line: I help (who) do (what), with a sharp detail or number.]
[Two or three sentences on what you do day to day. Add one or two concrete results: I did X, which led to Y.]
[A sentence that works in your role title, top skills, and main tools in plain language.]
[What you're looking for right now and how to reach you.]
That's it. Four short blocks. You can write a good first draft in fifteen minutes, then sharpen it over a week as better phrasing comes to you.
What to avoid
Corporate third-person. "John is a seasoned leader who thrives in fast-paced environments." Switch to "I" and watch it get readable.
Buzzword soup. "Results-oriented, detail-driven, dynamic self-starter" tells a recruiter nothing. Replace adjectives with evidence. Show the result, skip the label.
A wall of text. One giant paragraph reads as a chore. Break it up. White space is not wasted space.
A copy of your resume. Your resume is a list. Your About section is a voice. They support each other, but they aren't the same document.
Make it sound like you
The hardest part isn't structure. It's pulling the right details out of your own career, then saying them in your own words. The wins that matter are usually the ones you've stopped noticing.
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